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So terrible I vomited and wanted to punch my computer screen at this stuffty creepypasta. Seriously, get this stuff out of my face!
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This is so beautiful I wish I can write creepypasta's like yours! Please, teach me!
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Author Topic: Meh first creepypasta C:  (Read 2940 times)

Story starts now (Hope you know its made up)





"Sarah, so what is the new house you're gunna buy?" Sammy asked.


"Oh, its a two story house. Seven bedrooms, Four bathrooms, backyard, pool, and a porch."Sarah answered.



Sammy and Sarah arrived at their new home.

"It looks beautiful!"Sarah said in an exicted voice.

"Lets see the bedrooms" Sammy said


As Sammy went up the stairs to check out his room, he heard a voice.

"It must be my brain playing tricks on me"Sammy said to himself.

As he entered the bedroom, it became harder to breath.

"Wierd. It is suddenly harder to breath in this room"

With his real hearing, he heard a voice.

It said "You made a mistake"

"Huh? Augh, this mind of mine is playing tricks again!" Sammy said.

"SAMMY COME QUICK! THE POOL IS BIG!"Sarah yelled.

"ALRIGHT! I'M COMING"Sammy yelled

As he got out of the bedroom, he can breath normaly again.

As he walked down the hallway he saw some figure.

It stared at him.

"Huh? Who are you? Get out of my house"Sammy said

The figure said "You must die"

"Look mind, stop playing tricks on me"

The figure dissapeared when he said that.

Sammy got to the pool

"Woah, that is big"Sammy said

"I know!" Sarah said

As he entered the house, he heard a loud noise that sounded like a Deagle shot.

"What was that noise. I heard it from the bathroom" Sammy said.

"I'm gunna come with you" Sarah said.

As sammy and Sarah walked into the bathroom, they saw a note.

It said

"You have made the mistake."

"That was what the mind said to me" Sammy said

"We should get some sleep" Sarah said

"Okay"Sammy said.

Sammy closed the door. Then they both tucked into bed.

Not long, they heard footsteps coming closer to their door.

"I hear footsteps" Sarah whispered

"Its just your mind, Sarah." Sammy whispered.

The footsteps stopped next to their door.

The door slowly opened. A claw was seen.

"I SEE A CLAW" Sarah yelled.

"Calm down Sarah" Sammy said

The claw rushed into the room. They saw a figure rushed at them.

"AAAAH" Sarah yelled.

Just when the claw almost stabbed Sammy, the figure dissapeared.

Sammy and Sarah are panting heavily.

"That was close..." Sarah said.

"They fell asleep"

DAY 2




"I'm gunna cook breakfast." Sarah said

As she entered the kitchen, a knife was hovering.

"Woah, why is that hovering"Sarah said

The knife rushed to her leg

The knife stabbed her leg, making her bleed

"HELP!!" Sarah screamed

"I'M COMING" Sammy yelled

Sammy found Sarah on the kitchen floor, barley concious.

"Take...me to the ER" Sarah said


Sarah went unconcious.

Sammy rushed Sarah to the ER


"Fatal injures"The nurse said.

"We'll take her into a room"A specialist said.

Sammy prayed Sarah would be ok.

Five hours later, the doctors came back.

"There is nothing we can do."The specialist said

"She has passed away" A doctor said.

Sammy started crying.

As soon as he started crying, the lights went out.

The lights turned back on and he saw dead doctors on the floor

"What...what is happening..."Sammy said.

The lights went out again.

Red eyes emereged from the far hallway.

The eyes got closer

"Who..who are you??" Sammy said

"I am your nightmare..."The eyes said.

"No...please no!"Sammy said

"Die" The eyes said

Sammy got stabbed in his heart.

Sammy bled to death


Story over c:
« Last Edit: September 06, 2012, 10:51:50 PM by Theepicman »

now rewrite it in actual story form

im sorry but that is actually one of the worst things ive ever read

Uh...

So what monster exactly killed them?
Did the kid just imagine it all and he actually killed the girl and himself or...?
I'm confused...

Uh...

So what monster exactly killed them?
Did the kid just imagine it all and he actually killed the girl and himself or...?
I'm confused...
I'll just say the history of the home.

The house was built in 1961.

When it was done, a mother moved in.

Her kid was not very smart. His mother could not find a school near the home.

Two weeks later after she bought the house. The kid did not know what he was doing.

He went into the kitchen, picked up a knife (The knife that stabbed Sarah)

He went into the mothers room, stabbed her in the chest killing her instantly.

"Mama?" The boy said

The boy for no reason or not knowing, kills himself.


Thar c:

im sorry but that is actually one of the worst things ive ever read
Did I ask for rates?

I couldn't help but laugh at,
"Die" The eyes said

Sammy got stabbed in his heart.

Sammy bled to death

hate to ruin your little smiley face but it still sucks
Did I ask for rates?
did i rate it?
*gasp* wow gee i didnt!

I couldn't help but laugh at,
"Die" The eyes said

Sammy got stabbed in his heart.

Sammy bled to death

Die by stab

hate to ruin your little smiley face but it still sucksdid i rate it?
*gasp* wow gee i didnt!
You rated in another way, dumbass.

at least spell my name right if you're going to kill me off  :cookieMonster:

You rated in another way, dumbass.
He said his opinion toward the story he didn't necessarily say 7/10.

just my mind playing tricks
bleh bleh bleh
just my mind playing tricks again!!
mind tricks

please, use that less.

0/10 compared to mine

sorry

You rated in another way, dumbass.
all opinions on the intelligence of my rear aside, i did not, in fact, rate your horrible story