Author Topic: Mah first creepypasta  (Read 2434 times)

Note before the creepypasta, yes, I know you aren't supposed to reveal that it is a creepypasta, but I am bored, so I will.
Lets make dis one about loz oot c: yes i know its common for nintendo games to have creepypastas, but I digress.

One day, I got bored at chatting with my parents about my dorm, so I went to my friend's house to go see what he decided to do, and I knocked, his mother opened the door, and she explained:
"Sorry, but he went to go see his dormmates, apparently he's with you, so you can go drive, don't be late!"

I got in my car and drove to my dorm to see them, I saw them and they were explaining the "times" they had about playing a populated title: The Legend of Zelda: Ocarina of Time. My friend held the cartridge, also if I didn't mention before his name is Ben, it was the original 1.0 Cartridge, except the cartridge's shield showed a different symbol, like a bobcat on a ledge with a bunch of swords other than the original Hylian Shield, I thought it looked better because I have a bond of felines so I told him: "Look at the shield." He looked at it, and he saw it's differences, he said that it showed a wolf howling with a bunch of swords, I replied, "No, it's a bobcat on a ledge with a bunch of swords behind it." It was dark so I fell asleep, I guess it was a two man only dorm, so the others left.

In the morning, I woke up just at the time Ben did, and I looked at the cartridge and said: "Ready?" He replied: "Yep, I'm ready." We put the cartridge in his N64, it started up fairly quickly, as if it was a totally new cartridge. It then showed a wolf howling on a ledge with a bunch of swords circling it at Hyrule Castle, and he was right, it was a wolf howling on the shield on the cartridge, It then showed Link walking up to the wolf, and he picked up one of the swords. The game then started to chug a tiny bit, and then it ran smoothly again, the wolf disappeared into the sword that he picked up, so the wolf was inside the sword, and he lifted the sword up then the title: The Legend of Zelda: Blade of the Wolf appeared, it scared me because on the cartridge it said: Ocarina of Time. He pressed start on it anyway. It had 5 files instead of 3, He decided to make a new one and named it: Wolf for no reason, the game started up a cutscene with Link running around at Hyrule, and then later the game started to chug a bit more, and then he saw the ring over Death Mountain. The game started some gameplay, he only had 2 1/2 hearts, not 3, He went to Death Mountain, and he found his horse, Epona. Except this time, there were 5 blades stabbed and Epona had no effect when interacted. He freaked out a tiny bit. he went up the trail, but at one point about 30 gorons rolled down Death Mountain trail, with a text box saying: It's the wolf! It's the wolf! Run!

They all disappeared, it was bizarre because it wasn't normal. He then was hit by one of the gorons, which appeared late, and he fell down to Kakiriko Village. It was all destroyed, as if it was using the Kakiriko Village design when Bongo Bongo destroyed it, but more destroyed than usual. He walked around, but only 1 house wasn't destroyed, but it was a hollow polygon. He found the shadow temple, there was a staircase to lead yourself there, so he did so, there was a piece of heart, he got it and his health extended to 2 1/2 hearts to 2 3/4 hearts. I thought it was nice because now every piece of heart is just one quarter added to your health. There were a bunch of gorons hiding in Shadow Temple, and then there started some framerate issues.

He could barely move, but he walked into a door with a LOT of re-deads in an indoor graveyard, he saved and ran back, saved again and went back into the re-dead room. However, right after he lost all of his health, a bunch of gorons ran through, and a wolf walked in, slowly, as he killed all of the re-deads and healed him, but however, he lost his sword, as the Wolf took it away and ran away.

Defenseless he was, but he went through the door, and all the gorons were there. He fell through a floor and found Navi there for some reason, as if there were 2 Navis in the world because Link had Navi but there was another Navi right by him, the other Navi gave him a bad Kokiri sword and a Hylian Shield, with the same wolf thing on it, however, they disappeared, and the other Navi said that he had to FIND those, not HAVE them. We got fairly frustrated, he then passed me the controller and I played the game a little. I fell into a hole and ended up in Hyrule Castle's Yard, except we saw no guards in sight. I left the idea alone, but when I got to Zelda, she was lying on the floor. We got a bit creeped out and we investigated her, but there was a text box that stated: "She murmurs: Wolf.............." Then we got scared and I burst into flames and the Game Over screen appeared, When we kept playing, we were in Hyrule Castle's Village place. The game started playing itself until we got to the place where you
have to go to Zelda. We saw a huge ledge, the game chugged more and then a Wolf appeared on the ledge. A cutscene started where the wolf howls, and then a bunch of swords circle the wolf, it then howls Zelda's lullaby and the world started burning from the ledge down. A text box appeared saying: Quick, grab the sword that the wolf has it's tail by, which was therefore difficult without burning, After about a 45 minutes we finally got the sword, the world stopped burning, but then Hyrule Castle turned into a different shape.

The wolf started talking to us saying: Investigate the Castle, the castle has no more population, it's yours now. The wolf then went into the sword. We saw Zelda flying into the sky, and she looked at us saying: What is wrong with Hyrule. She started following us, I walked into Hyrule Castle, and it said: Your Castle now. I heard a noise, like something fell down. The design of Hyrule was totally different.

[To be continued]

Give a rating at this point (We aren't at the "scary" part yet.)
« Last Edit: November 26, 2012, 10:46:24 PM by Altair3140 »

belongs here not

belongs elsewhere yes

The thread that killed Games.

your writing is pretty bad, its good to be excited about writing and all but you might want to work on your writing

The day of the boogie: an original creepypasta by Hiiro326 (copywrited)

One day I woke up, and to my surprise my parents were next to my bed!!
I exclaimed "MOM! DAD! I'M NAKED!"
and they were like "boogie-oogie-oogie"
I was kinda weirded out but I was like "ok" so I went downstairs to get some cereal (with milk!!)

As I was pouring my special K/fruit loops (i like them both idk) my parents were blankly staring at me

"BOOGIE-OOGIE-OOGIE!" they chanted
I was freaked out, so after I finished my cereal I decided to call my buddy Jeffy and see if he was having the same dilemma,

"Yo, Jeffy you aight? are your parents aight? everything aight?"
"Bro, you gotta stop saying, aight, aight bro?"
"Aight"
"cool, yeah my parents are aight, they said some 'boogie-boogie-boo-boo' stuff earli-"
'THEY SAID WHAT?!?!?!?!"
I was freaking out!!!
"Uhhhh bro they said something weird when I woke up... why?"
"I'M COMING!"
I was coming.

when i got there I rang his doorbell and realized my parents had followed me there! his parents opened the door! I was surrounded!!!

They all chanted "BOOGIE-OOGIE-OOGIE" and closed in on me.

I started crying

"I'M A GONER!" I thought to myself

but then something happened!

Jeffy SHOT OUR PARENTS WITH HIS 16-Gauge!

I thanked him and as we searched his house I found a diary in his mom's nightstand


I opened it
on the last page it said "gonna take Jeffy and his little friend to the roller disco tonight! Boogie-Oogie-Oogie!!"
I broke down into tears.

We just killed our parents.


NOW WE'RE COMING FOR YOU!!

Truly an atrocious piece. Let me sum it up for those who don't want to lose IQ points. (And give a little review for the creature that wrote it)
Guy goes to friend's mom's house. Mom says he's at his dorm. (Complete waste of a paragraph. Dialogue was written completely wrong. lern 2 grammar)
Guy arrives at dorm. Friend is talking with other friends about Ocarina of Time. Friend (BTW HIS NAM IS BEN) waves cartridge around. Guy notices the cartridge label looks different. Everyone but Ben and Guy leaves. (Terrible attempt at plot development, horrible attempt at using an appositive, more fail dialogue.)
More horrible dialogue. They play game. Scary stuff happens. TO BE CONTINUED. (Just... no...)

WHAT THE forget IS PUNCTUATION GUYS

creppypasta by freek

i was playing pokemon on my DS and then oh no my mewtwo evolved! that can't happen so that's why i was scared.

the end

Please complete Middleschool English before writing ever again, please an thank-you.

The story was monotonous throughout and it made me feel like I knew exactly what was going to happen.

The various oddities (i.e. the shield design and 2 and a half hearts) did not add any form of "creepy" to this story. It felt bland and made up on the spot. This story couldn't shake a leaf.

It didn't even feel like a Zelda creepypasta. Sure you mentioned the game, some, but the stuff was focused on your fursona wolfy mcdoggy dog. No backstory on the wolf? Where did the cart come from? Why was it modded by furries? What's going on in this thread?

A story has a strong beginning, middle, and end.

GUYYYYS RATE MY CREEPY PASTA I WORKED HARD

>ctrl+f
>search ben
>find ben
>leave


Tip for making creepypastas: always use original content, never another story rehashed


Please complete Middleschool English before writing ever again, please an thank-you.

The story was monotonous throughout and it made me feel like I knew exactly what was going to happen.

The various oddities (i.e. the shield design and 2 and a half hearts) did not add any form of "creepy" to this story. It felt bland and made up on the spot. This story couldn't shake a leaf.

It didn't even feel like a Zelda creepypasta. Sure you mentioned the game, some, but the stuff was focused on your fursona wolfy mcdoggy dog. No backstory on the wolf? Where did the cart come from? Why was it modded by furries? What's going on in this thread?

A story has a strong beginning, middle, and end.


10/10 great review, better than OP's story

I got one.

once my wife and I stoped to take a picture of the old post office It was very quiet 10 am in The morning and we could hear a lady signing it was coming from the INSIDE OF THE BUILDING..!

she sounded old and soudned like she was singing in church. HWEVER NO ONE WAS AROUND..............

THE NED.