Author Topic: Is this poem I just wrote too inappropriate to give to my teacher? (Read 930 times)

Brian Smithers · April 22, 2013, 06:04:55 PM

So we are doing poetry in English and I just wrote this poem, though it is a bit...
weird. It could be taken several ways and depending on the way you read it, it could be very awkward.
So guys, I have to know, is this too awkward/inappropriate/weird to give to my english teacher?

Quote from: Brian Smith's Poetry

Why do you love me daddy?
Do you love me for the work I do
or the grades I get?
Do you love me because of my potential,
or my physical ability?

Why do you love me mommy?
Do you love me for my smile,
or the kisses I blow you?
Do you love me because I help you cook lunch on the weekends?

Why do you love me God?
Do you love me for what I have done,
or what I will do?
Do you love me because I care for everyone?

Why do I love myself?
Do I love myself because of what I think,
or what I do?

Like I said: weird.

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Wynd_Fox · April 22, 2013, 06:05:44 PM

I don't see anything awkward in it.

Nonnel · April 22, 2013, 06:06:25 PM

Better than I could write.

BlockoCrafter · April 22, 2013, 06:06:44 PM

Quote from: Wynd_Fox on April 22, 2013, 06:05:44 PM

I don't see anything awkward in it.

Titanium Man · April 22, 2013, 06:07:40 PM

god dosnt exist lol xd11111

sorrel · April 22, 2013, 06:07:45 PM

a tad odd
just a tad
taaaad

sir dooble · April 22, 2013, 06:08:20 PM

Seems nothing wrong with it to me.

All poems can be taken in multiple ways.
There's no way the poet can plan for every single way it can be read.
If you're happy with it, then you should be fine.

It's nice.
Does it have a title?

Blockzillahead · April 22, 2013, 06:08:33 PM

yes it will offend your teacher because they dont have parents

Sami2ss · April 22, 2013, 06:09:23 PM

that's a very nice poem. at first, when i read "daddy" i thought this was going to be something loveual, but it turned out to be nice.

you could say it reflects on your curiosity of why people love each other and if it's true love.

idk lol

Brian Smithers · April 22, 2013, 06:09:38 PM

haha ok guys, thanks :).
I just call it "Why do you love me?" @sir dooble.

Mute · April 22, 2013, 06:09:51 PM

If you dont have to read it out loud then your fine.
I wrote "big ass house" on a test in my school and got the answer right so, im assuming it will be fine

Nickelob Ultra · April 22, 2013, 06:14:27 PM

If you really want inappropriate, make the first letter of every line spell out something. That's what my friend did with his poem that was shown in a lecture to every student, and it spelled out "Prepare your star fish".

Jairo · April 22, 2013, 06:17:37 PM

Quote from: Nickelob Ultra on April 22, 2013, 06:14:27 PM

If you really want inappropriate, make the first letter of every line spell out something. That's what my friend did with his poem that was shown in a lecture to every student, and it spelled out "Prepare your star fish".

that's hilarious

Bisjac · April 22, 2013, 06:18:05 PM

its kinda super gay. but i dont see anything inappropriate.

Brian Smithers · April 22, 2013, 06:18:29 PM

Quote from: Nickelob Ultra on April 22, 2013, 06:14:27 PM

If you really want inappropriate, make the first letter of every line spell out something. That's what my friend did with his poem that was shown in a lecture to every student, and it spelled out "Prepare your star fish".

I think that just made my stuffty ass day.
Thanks :-)