If you are trolling then "ololololz ur funy".
If not, then I would say that this speech is downright garbage. It sounds more like randomly goofing off while on the stage than an actual speech.
What you need is a strong beginning. Cut the bullstuff of "Hello there!" just start the speech with something memorable.
It also seems like that while making that speech, you don't care whether or not your audience pays attention. Ask rhetoric questions that should make them interested in what you say.
You should also organize your points, preferably to neat little three part lists, as those are really catchy. Remember, three's a magical number. If you are planning to make a very strong point, don't be afraid to use repetition. Alliterating words can surely make a lasting impression on your audience, if used correctly.
By the ending, you should probably sum up your points, and also give away one last impulse that makes the whole speech memorable. Remember, your audience can not leave unsatisfied or if they do, you'll never get to be the president.
If you incorporate a few of these ideas into your speech and also cut the hate-talk, you'll actually stand a chance. And that's what you want, don't you?
