Amber - Chapter 2 Done [9/14/10]

[Shadowed999]

Sorry,I fell asleep. :P

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[Dippindots]

You should work on your grammar a bit. It switched between present and past a few times.

[keonesan]

You should work on your grammar a bit. It switched between present and past a few times.

Yeah I know. The part where it when into present tense was an exert and not originally written with the chapter. I was too lazy to convert it. :P

[Dusty12]

Stories in present tense don't sound right.

[Shadowed999]

"I don't need a gun. I'm going to strangle that bastard with my bare hands."

I said that on L4D2 multiplayer before.....and I strangled that bastard,too.

[keonesan]

"I don't need a gun. I'm going to strangle that bastard with my bare hands."

I said that on L4D2 multiplayer before.....and I strangled that bastard,too.

Lol wut?

Stories in present tense don't sound right.

I can kinda agree with that but it's not too bad I suppose?

[Deus Ex]

Its not too bad, but I swear this is the first story Ive read that was present tense.

[Dippindots]

This judge sentenced Kate to death. Then they shot her in the street.

[keonesan]

This judge sentenced Kate to death. Then they shot her in the street.

And your point is?

[Dippindots]

Executed in the street? By being shot in the head?

[Deus Ex]

Brains splattered over corrugated metal, dripping through the holes as people shrank back in disgust~

[keonesan]

Brains splattered over corrugated metal, dripping through the holes as people shrank back in disgust~

Nice. I already used corrugated though and I don't want to repeat adjectives.

[Watcher In The Myst]

amazing

[keonesan]

amazing

Really? :D

[Watcher In The Myst]

Yes. This is the best book I've ever written that isn't a published book.


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