just got started on this
thoughts so far?
I actually don't like it at all, sorry
The original synth is a bit overly detuned in comparison to the vocals, and is pretty bland to be filling the entire first few measures, I would at least put some thirds into the chord instead of plain octaves. The rhythm that you are using them in is a little bit vague to be standalone as well. The piece does not at all reflect the original. Also, at the ending of the clip it seems a little bit out-of-sync.
Then again, I don't like anything that's been posted recently; I barely enjoy the Kill Paris one at all and I downright dislike "Peace," without even accounting for the fact that Genesis was already taken as a very popular band name.