[100x70] Cerebrated Chronicles - Who thought a party of 8 was a good idea?

[Yosher]

Now. If i was to go into your adventure and say it was boring you would get very upset and claim i was being an starfish and I was saying "Im better than you"

Lol, no. Do you know how long I've been tolerating this sort of stuff from you? That's right. Ever since I started this whole adventure business. Every time you found a little flaw in my adventures, whether it was about your questioning the realism, or the art style, you had to nitpick about it constantly and you still do.

And now, when I say that I find your adventure kind of boring, once, you get insanely upset. What the hell is wrong with you? But alright, like you said, I'm going to stop now. Not going to derail this topic. But seriously, still, I find your adventure kind of boring.

They're like Natsu and Gray.

lol

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[Swholli]

Let's take a moment here because we obviously all need to understand the difference between criticisms vs opinions.

Criticisms are empirical ideas that can be tested against previous versions of a body of work or a collected knowledge about a subject. The work doesn't always have to fit a formula, but the best ones usually tend to take the ideas of the past and build on them. When the new product is inferior or flawed in comparison to another, better model, a criticism can then be waged against that work as a whole. These are constructive (whether hurtful or not) as they allow the person being criticized to work on improving themselves to an already set field of standards so that they may break out and continue doing original work (the idea of "you may break the rules once you know them").

Criticisms usually include things like:

realism, or the art style

Or writing style and structure.

Now, an opinion is something derived from an already existing piece of work that is under compliance with the set of rules or breaks them on the purpose, but does so in a way that the problem with the experience is not the structure or design, simply the content chosen to be displayed.

Saying something like

your adventure kind of boring

, when all Menen was doing is establishing his characters instead of constantly having them fight something is an opinion. He did something that every major author or screenplay writer would do in what is usually considered a "good" piece of work. In fact, Menen's adventure is actually rather trite in this specific faucet troupe of storytelling. But the question of whether its good or not doesn't rely on composition, just content.

Some people like their work to have characters whom you can relate to; whom you know and understand and admire as individuals, as if they were real, so you can connect to them.

Others enjoy constant conflict and boom pow explosions. Those are mostly children.

[Yosher]

-snip-

I read the entire thing, but really? Do you people really have to constantly put words into my mouth?

When I say "interesting" I do not mean "boom pow explosions" or constant battling. When the hell did I ever even say anything CLOSE to that? When I say action-filled, I mean something interesting. All that the characters have done so far is walk, talk to people a bit, and randomly kick people in the head. I now understand that all of you have a different definition of "interesting" than I do. I'm just going to stop reading this adventure, it's probably for the best.

[Swholli]

I now understand that all of you have a different definition of "interesting" than I do.

You just described the very essence of an opinion.

Which was what I thought the entire argument was about.

We were talking about criticisms of your work.

Sir, you have not seen criticism. The things Menen has brought up are tame compared to the veracious lashing I could give you on your adventure. I choose not to in the respect that it's of nothing of importance. You're free to tell your story your way. But if you come in here speaking all high and mighty about what's interesting, then you have obviously not given this reading any thought.

[Alteration]

I'm going to interrupt for a sec and post Raxii's theme "Luck on My Side/The Titan Turrican (Remix)" because I just finished it.

[Menen]

: What the hell! How did you-

: POW!
: Unf!
: MENEN NO!

: MENEN WHAT THE HELL, MAN?
: What?
: YOU KILLED HIM!
: No I didn't! He's just unconscious!
: Oh... Why?
: I'm not sure. Maybe its because I hit him on the head with a steel bar?
: No I mean why did you knock him unconscious?
: Because I can't get into his head otherwise.
: What?
: Yeah. I was reading the Book of Imagination and it said something about entering people's heads but only when they are asleep.
: Uhm....
: If I was to take a guess, I'd say he was hypnotized or brainwashed. If I can get into his head I could possibly remove the effects of either of those things and bring him back.
: But what if it was neither of those, and he is following Uviso by sheer belief?
: Soren, please. No one is that crazy to follow a super baddie like that. Im guessing either most of his goons are stupid or brainwashed.
: A man of this intellect would never assist a villain unless it was against his will.
: So will entering his brain... hurt him?
: Not too sure. Hopefully not.
: Are you sure about this? It could be dangerous.
: Do you want this man back to normal or not?
: ...
: Well?
: Yes. I do.
: Okay. I just need a few minutes to get prepared. Go seal the doors.
: On it!

Menen has to prepare to enter Dr. Verton's mind. He can't make things with Imagination in Verton's brain, so he must make things before he goes. Menen has 10 Ingots (If you count the 2 on the floor he has 12), 5 Though fabrics, and 1 Profane Pound (Curse words) What should he make?

You currently have...
Blade of Thought
Knife of Knowledge
Cognitive Crossbow
Steel Polearm
Steel Sword

(You can also deconstruct weapons that contain Meta-Materials into their base components)

I'm going to interrupt for a sec and post Raxii's theme "Luck on My Side/The Titan Turrican (Remix)" because I just finished it.

I cant hear it.

[?]

make a shield and a hat

[Menen]

make a shield and a hat

Out of what? Ingots or Pounds?


(Pounds work like Ingots, but are much heavier and always black. Pounds also do more damage when used in making Heavy Weapons like hammers or great swords. You may also mix things, such as making a pole out of ingots and a Hammer head out of the Pound to make a Warhammer)

[?]

deconstruct the knife and the sword, make a pole out of ingots, a hammerhead at the end out of pounds, and put 2 blades on the hammerhead made out of ingots
also, a knit hat out of thought fabrics

what items does soren have?

[Menen]

deconstruct the knife and the sword, make a pole out of ingots, a hammerhead at the end out of pounds, and put 2 blades on the hammerhead made out of ingots
also, a knit hat out of thought fabrics

what items does soren have?

As it is saved in my Character Data sheets:

1 Tower Map
1 Blueprint of gate
1 Small Gold Wrench
1 Large Gold Wrench
1 gold ingot
4 Level 1 Magic Relays
1 Crystal Bag (Contains 12 Light Crystals)
1 Small Gear
1 Crystal Cannon (No Mods)
1 Imagination Ingot (In form of Exclamation Mark) (He should give that to Menen)

[Alteration]

I cant hear it.

The forget?
It should be fine, I can hear it.

[Menen]

The forget?
It should be fine, I can hear it.

Send it over skype or something i guess.

or steam or something

[PowerDag]

menen is about to get in his hhead

[Menen]

menen is about to get in his hhead

Hes only projecting his consciousness into Verton so he can free him from the Mind Control

[?]

soren gives the ingot to menen