SCP Megatopic - oh wow i havent seen this in a while

[Frontrox]

http://www.scp-wiki.net/termination-log-scp-316
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[Big Brother]

http://www.scp-wiki.net/termination-log-scp-316
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why did he kill 316? i didnt see what he did wrong

[TeslaCoil]

I'm almost ready to post my first SCP! But I've come across the issue of being able to make those black blocks of text so I can cover up the Doctor's name.
FIXED!

Besides that is there anything I can add to help improve it guys?

Image credit goes to RIOT!

[Demian]

I'm almost ready to post my first SCP! But I've come across the issue of being able to make those black blocks of text so I can cover up the Doctor's name.
FIXED!

Besides that is there anything I can add to help improve it guys?

Image credit goes to RIOT!

"two (4) members"
Derp.

"Gothic Armor"
Why do so many people suck with capital letters. It's "Gothic armor".

"roughly 1.789 m tall"
You do not give a rough estimate of the height with three decimal places. Make it 1.7 m.

"1500 A.D.."
Engilsh pls. It's "1500 A.D."

You have a truck named Dump.

"unmovable when hit with speed exceeding 20 MPH"
Just say it doesn't move when struck because that's what you're probably looking for. Unless you mean that the armor is glued to the ground for a few hours when something hits it at a speed exceeding 20 MPH.

Black out Volvo. Specific brands are very rarely visible. Scrap the joke.

Swinging weapons? How about melee weapons?

[TeslaCoil]

Thanks. Will edit.

I'm still adding to the page. Hopefully I can add some more beef to the bone. Furthur changes can be seen HERE.

[Skyfrost.]

Mayeb it should be Euclid Safe because of the car accidents

[Alteration]

It's pretty original, though the location should be changed to be more historicaly accurate.

Subject: SCP-590
 Photographed Activity: Subject is playing with blocks.
 Photo Result: SCP-590's face is close up to the camera, filling the entire photo. His hands are displayed as if pressed against the lens. His mouth is open, and tears fill his eyes.

Sadness-Jimmies rustled. :c

For those who don't understand
And to clear up confusion

[TeslaCoil]

I placed it in that particular location because for the most part it's not suppose to be there. lol

[Alteration]

I placed it in that particular location because for the most part it's not suppose to be there. lol

Oh; still, I find it weird that armor with a locale-specific design would show up in an area entirely different to that of it's origin. Perhaps something more generic-looking would work better and be more mysterious as it would have no direct origin to a location.

[TeslaCoil]

I could change it to that. But I will need an armor that's not recognizable and not overly fantasy looking.


Seriously, I'm open to anything you guys got. This is the blocklanders article to play with.

[Big Brother]

I could change it to that. But I will need an armor that's not recognizable and not overly fantasy looking.


Seriously, I'm open to anything you guys got. This is the blocklanders article to play with.

err...the tone you've used seems a little off. The actual SCP has been rated currently at -15...doin somethin wrong

[TeslaCoil]

err...the tone you've used seems a little off. The actual SCP has been rated currently at -15...doin somethin wrong

Suggestions?

[Big Brother]

Formal language, for starters.

You also haven't used enough detail. "The armor comes complete with gauntlets, lower leg armor, helmet, upper body armor and a sword." This doesn't tell me anything about it, it could include lining of bear skin for all I know. "after the armor fell out of the back of it's transport vehicle and collided with a dump truck stopping it instantly." This doesn't happen as much as you'd think. Stuff doesn't just fall out like that. Besides, wouldn't SCP-1338 of weighed down the transport vehicle? Seeing as it can stop a dump truck, I'd imagine so. You also wrote "No effect". This is probably the most bland thing you could write in an addendum and as a result the highly critical community of SCP probably rolled their eyes and downvoted. Write exactly what happened instead. Test 4: You just wrote [DATA EXPUNGED]. Add a little bit more detail to give the reader some sort of an idea of what the hell happened.

[TeslaCoil]

Thanks, I'll keep most of that in mind for future attempts. I looked at the comments page and it looks like there are only a few people who think it's redeemable. Unfortunetly I think I'll just let the page get deleted and rethink my methods.

[TeslaCoil]

http://www.scp-wiki.net/scp-1338
Improvements have been applied.