If anyone can go through the kickstarter page and check my spelling and grammar I'd appreciate it, or if anything seems confusing.
- Capitalise the word "steam" in the line "Current platforms are PC & Linux, and will be coming to steam"
- "Each time you play you'll have to figure out what each magical potion and scroll
do!" should say "what each magical potion and scroll
does!"
- "Or me rather, my name is Anthony Rotondo
, I'm a game developer from Boston." - A commar or period makes that line flow better
- For the Stretch Goals section, consider using a colon after the name of each stretch goal, for example; "12k Mac port: Thankfully the engine is already mostly compatible with the mac os, I just need to buy a mac as well as a few pieces of software."
- $36 backing, 4-pack. Does backing this also get your name in the kickstarter credits? You should mention so if it does.
- $40 backing - Change the words "in game kickstarter" to "in-game kickstarter". It should make that sentence run more smoothly, and both words appear on the same line. Consider also replacing a commar in the second paragraph with a period, to make it less of a run-on sentence.
- $70 pledge, 4-pack beta. Does backing this also get your name in the credits? Should mention so if it does.
- $150 pledge. "and a whatever text you want" sounds confusing. Try "Create your own secret room, featuring a unique layout, your character, and accompanied by whatever text you want!"
Everything else seems pretty good.
Looks just about ready to go!
